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It was not the first time Maria went through a situation like this. She walked into the damp room and stood under the doorframe. The only sound was that of her steps over old garbage that filled the floor; a viscous liquid created a small cover over it, but she decided not to pay much attention to this, knowing what it was could made her loose her composure.  It smelled nothing like the average waste, something rotted in that room; it was the smell of human flesh and trapped souls. She knew this too well.

After glancing inside a little deeper nothing else was needed. Maria knew that any movement outside of what was planned, a plan alien to her yet familiar, could be the last one. This did not encourage her much; she knew the outcome and it involved her as the new inhabitant of an old coffin, a box she should have occupied almost thirty years ago to make true what most believed. Could it be 1973 all over again? Who could know about it? After all, she was just a ghost since then, but her thoughts did not matter.

Maria reckoned what she made sure to never face; it was a surprise, not a good one, nonetheless she still smirked. A familiar place and setting turned unsettling, not that it was cozy before. This time she was not the one holding the knife.
©2008-2009 ~markbelous
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Author's Comments

This is the first episode of what could be short series, call it a chapter if you may.

If it is liked I will keep writing, if it is not, then why bother.

The next episode will be written when this one gets to ten views, quite little I know, but the amounts will increase as the story progresses.

Hope you like it, critique and suggestions encouraged.

Markbelous.

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UPDATE
It took a day for those ten, thank you all!
The next steps will be uploaded soon.

Here is a link to Chapter II
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:iconradgamer13:
wow great use of words and descriptivity
:iconironpete:
oh very nice great job :D cant wait for more

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"This is the way the blind man comes! Princes, princes, lock step, two heads lit by the eyes of one." ~Tiresias

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Triforce babe (;
:iconmarkbelous:
Thank you very much my friend! I really appreciate it, and soon will post a continuation. It will take just two more views... hahahaahaha.

Un abrazo!

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Success, Satisfactions, Transcendence, and Good Company.
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A mystery written as views and favorites accumulate.
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And hope: [link]
:iconmarkbelous:
Thank you mate, really appreciate it! Let me know when you put another piece up, I enjoy reading others as much as I enjoyed being read.

Two more views on that and will post a the next chapter.

Un abrazo!

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Success, Satisfactions, Transcendence, and Good Company.
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A mystery written as views and favorites accumulate.
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And hope: [link]
:icongirberry:
Very nice. Not too much detail, but just enough to enhance the story. Like pepper in soup, methinks.

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GEESE.

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PEACE.
:iconmarkbelous:
Appreciate it! Trying to keep the narrative flowing on this one concentrating a little less on the description.

Thank you for reading.

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Success, Satisfactions, Transcendence, and Good Company.
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A mystery written as views and favorites accumulate.
[link]

And hope: [link]
:icongirberry:
you're welcome! I just wrote a new poem...I think you might like it.

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GEESE.

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PEACE.
:iconmarkbelous:
I certainly did!

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Success, Satisfactions, Transcendence, and Good Company.
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A mystery written as views and favorites accumulate.
[link]

And hope: [link]
:icongirberry:
i'm glad!

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GEESE.

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PEACE.

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